Very good paper, Billy. My first suggestion: work on writing shorter, punchier sentences. Try to make one good point in each sentence, rather than trying to put too much information in. Also, you need to work on your Works Cited. Use EasyBib.com to enter your citations. That should help a lot.
Excellent interview. It must have been awful for your parents, having worked in the towers, so be over in Europe when the attacks happened. That was a very interesting perspective.
Very good paper, Billy. My first suggestion: work on writing shorter, punchier sentences. Try to make one good point in each sentence, rather than trying to put too much information in. Also, you need to work on your Works Cited. Use EasyBib.com to enter your citations. That should help a lot.
ReplyDeleteExcellent interview. It must have been awful for your parents, having worked in the towers, so be over in Europe when the attacks happened. That was a very interesting perspective.
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